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Wet

Title: Wet
Pairing: JongKey
Rating: R
Genre: Gen
Word count: 186
Warnings: None
Summary: Steam fills the room, and he can't breathe.





Piping hot water rains over Key’s neck and shoulders in a syncopated rhythm, pounding to the floor in sheets. A thick cloak of steam folds around him and flows up, over, and through the open door of the shower stall, filling the room.

He’s not alone.

He’s being watched.

Key trails his palms up and down his chest and abdomen, swirling soap bubbles in intricate patterns along the way. His right hand travels down to his cock and -




Jonghyun sits on the marbled countertop and lets his head loll back onto the mirror. Water droplets drip from his hair down to his temples and the bridge of his nose. He draws in a breath thick with steam and the heady fragrance of Key’s body wash. Though his eyes flutter in pleasure, they never leave Key’s form, as rivulets of water swirl down his spine.

Key puts on a show for him.

He likes being watched.

Touching is unnecessary. Key glances over to his voyeur and their eyes connect, breaking the invisible barrier between them. Jonghyun strokes himself ardently until -




Then Key beckons him in.






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A/N: Experimenting, (and trying a little hard, but) this was fun! I got really good mileage out of my dictionary/thesaurus app. lol Requires some suspension of disbelief if you know anything about typical Korean bathrooms. Don’t mind me. :]

Comments

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bestplace
Dec. 1st, 2012 11:31 pm (UTC)
SPOT HOLY FUCK
bestplace
Dec. 2nd, 2012 03:10 am (UTC)
wellllll this was a lovely little piece to come upon, and regardless of its short length, I very much enjoyed it. even though it was small, it made me crave more, and it's going to be quite hard to not quote the entire thing in my comment OTL;;

A thick cloak of steam folds around him and flows up, over, and through the open door of the shower stall, filling the room. pretty imagery. I felt like this entire thing was dedicated to imagery, maybe not solely, but a great deal. and good imagery is the best, my friend, the best. it makes me get all warm inside when the vocabulary is just right, perfect to the point of where I have to re-read certain lines numerous times. I did that a lot during this fic. c:

Key trails his palms up and down his chest and abdomen, swirling soap bubbles in intricate patterns along the way. His right hand travels down to his cock and - oh god oh god oh god--

He draws in a breath thick with steam and the heady fragrance of Key’s body wash. Though his eyes flutter in pleasure, they never leave Key’s form, as rivulets of water swirl down his spine. this whole picture is the definition of unf, my god.

Touching is unnecessary. I liked this line. I like how you incorperate a new little kink into every fic you write. there are so many kinks I want to write, but don't know how. sensei, please teach me. /bows

Jonghyun strokes himself ardently until - ooohh you got me on "ardently". I had to google that one. -v-

and then:
Then Key beckons him in. fuck yes omg. so much room for mind-wandering but an ending that still leaves me satisfied.

you said this was experimenting, and I think that this is definitely the direction you should continue to head in. beautifully written, I loved every word. great job bb ♥
hautekeyture
Dec. 2nd, 2012 04:39 am (UTC)
this comment. is. longer. than. the. story. lmao.

THANK YOU so much bb, you should see the goofy smile i get every time i read one of your comments, it's not cute haha. i'm so so glad you enjoyed too.

YES. the imagery was the whole point. i got the idea while i was -surprise,surprise- in the shower and watching the steam and... yeah.

KEKE

you have no idea how many times i re-wrote that line to get it just right. but when i did, it felt so good. i'm glad it resonated with you too ^^.

idek how that happens, honestly. i just get an idea and there it is. you, however, can write whatever you want to, we both know that's the truth. you just have to go about doing it. i believe in you! (and i've already established that you're the sensei in our relationship, stop it. /bows lower)

\o/ mission accomplished! not really though, i was in the dictionary/thesaurus for-fucking-ever looking for the perfect word for that, and almost put passionate, but looked in the entry for passionate and bam! there was "ardent" in the synonyms. i was very pleased.

:DD *wiggles eyebrows* that line wasn't part of the original plan, but i was left a smidge unsatisfied. so i took a nap lol, and when i woke up there it was waiting to be transferred from my brain to my doc file. again, i was pleased.


yaaaayyyyy i'm so happy you think so. i just worry that it comes off a bit pretentious with all the alliteration and w/e, but i'm just trying to paint pretty pictures... of course on the other had, idek if i can carry elements of this style to my other stuff so who knows tbh. anyway thank you again, it really means a lot to me to get your opinions and feedback. <33
snazzy_bop
Dec. 2nd, 2012 01:38 am (UTC)
OMFG AHXSGNXNVVKJSDKALFGH
spot.
snazzy_bop
Dec. 2nd, 2012 06:29 am (UTC)
I really liked this <3 it was really different from your other fics and kind of... cool ksjdflj fuck it was amazing.

it was like simple and intricate and just omg i'm not even going to try and sound educated this was flawless okay that's all you need to know <3

you should write something like this again! it was a very succesful 'experiment' :D
hautekeyture
Dec. 2nd, 2012 06:38 am (UTC)
thanks so much love! i'm glad you enjoyed. yeah it was really different and a lot of fun.

hahaha you're so funny and thank you, honestly. i'm not worthy of all these compliments kekeke. i was going for simple though. more atmosphere than anything else.

\o/ success! i definitely will explore this style again /fingers crossed. regular fic will probably stay closer to how i already do it but i can see myself writing more drabbles like this.

thank you again, as always <33
vodkalicca
Dec. 2nd, 2012 09:22 am (UTC)
Hi! Just reading some of your fics and i love it haha.




P.S : i love your smuts


Let's be friends,
XOXO,
Vodkalicca
hautekeyture
Dec. 2nd, 2012 05:42 pm (UTC)
hey there, i'm so glad! lol thank you for reading.

p.s.: KEKE thanks~~ i aim to please.

yes, let's! <33
katja_dark
Dec. 2nd, 2012 09:01 pm (UTC)
I'm still amazed by the amount of feelings that can be expressed in so few lines like you did! :D

So beautiful that made my mind go further XD.
"Touching is unnecessary"...this was just so awesome!, really, it was so simple but with a lot of feelings expressed.

Great work, even if you say it was experimental, and, I must say...like English isn´t my native language, I had to go for my dictionary XD, but it is fine that I just learned some new words :)

question: Can I add you as a friend? ^_^

See you!
hautekeyture
Dec. 2nd, 2012 09:30 pm (UTC)
aw you're so nice! thank you so much. i'm really glad people are quoting the lines that i loved too yay!

oh, believe me, i had to go for my dictionary too haha. i had a hard time finding the exact right words at first... OTL

of course! i'll add anyone who adds me, no questions asked. especially sweet regular reader/commenters like you!^^ <3
risque
Dec. 19th, 2012 11:39 am (UTC)
oooh I liked this, even if it was so short
hautekeyture
Dec. 24th, 2012 01:04 am (UTC)
oh thank you so much! i'm kinda proud of it if i'm being honest lol. thanks for reading and commenting! <33
grify94
Jan. 1st, 2013 01:50 pm (UTC)
then key beckons him....hahahaha, sorry i couldn't help but laugh, lol i enjoy a good bit of creepy reciprocated perving!! yay i usually don't read drabbles but liked this, even though it was a tad anorexic :( soooooooo *cough* when is ur *cough* daegu fic coming??? AHHHHHHHH i'm dying from holiday boredom, save me with ur epicness!!! anywho hope ur newyear and xmas were enjoyable coz mine were molto boring and unseasonably cold :-C .
hautekeyture
Jan. 2nd, 2013 02:27 am (UTC)
hey bb, lmao it's okay if you laughed. it is kinda creepy if you think about it and i'm glad you liked it despite its length (or lack thereof) haha.

SIGH. i'm glad you asked about this because i need a kick in the butt for daegu fic. i'm almost done with the initial writing but i'm just writer's blocked on a transition scene. i deviated from my original outline a bit so now i really need a transition scene in a crucial spot for it to make sense/be believable and i can't think for the life of me what to put there. soooo i've been neglecting it a bit trying to think of something, and then it needs to be edited to death which takes me forever and i might have to call on my beta lol.

ANYWAY now that you're bored to death from my explanation haha i'm hoping valentines day (which might be kind of nice) at the latest. :/ ughhhhh but i hopefully can post some other easier things in between. but it will be finished! ...someday...

and my christmas/new year were good! a little boring haha but i got to see my bffs and that's all that matters.

thanks as always for taking an interest in my stories bb! <33
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